my first poem ,,,, i wrote it for my girlfriend Sheri

Wimsicle · February 04, 2003, 05:46:14 AM

well let me know what ya think of it.....

Fate

Your beauty is like the deepest color of
A perfect rose, we met one spring day
I confessed unto you my passions, desires, love,
Things yet to do, honor calls me away

Memories fade slowly like a sunset.
Always there some remain, kindness, beauty.
I focus in pain of times of peace, rest
Would be a welcomed friend, but duty calls me.

Once again, but from with in I feel it.
Upon a strangers face I see't traces
Of a perfect rose, her eyes filled with light,
Sparks ignite from the depth of hidden places.

Our love shall make poets weep, eternally
Binding, a child's prayer answered unknowingly.

thanks all
_wimsy

Fizzgig · February 04, 2003, 06:05:42 AM

it's beautiful hun your very talented

Airelyn · February 04, 2003, 06:11:28 AM

That is very beautiful... very well written with a nice tempo.

Be proud cause that is a great poem.

Tholan · February 04, 2003, 02:27:39 PM

I like it!

Fadanat Thunderstorm · February 05, 2003, 03:21:00 PM

Wimsy I really liked this. Could not post anything funny about it,

Here.

FAD

However I did want to have some fun on another thread. I am not mocking you, but I sensed a humorous moment building inside me.

Zorvic · February 05, 2003, 04:02:47 PM

Very well written.

Reyburn · February 05, 2003, 05:08:49 PM

Mind if I steal your poem Wim? You never know when i might be needing to get back into some's good graces.

Wimsicle · February 06, 2003, 03:32:31 AM

thanks all it really means alot to hear good news about things you put your heart into

/hugs

-Wimsy

Llilith · February 06, 2003, 03:10:50 PM

Wim it is very nice. I really liked it also. :)